THROUGH YOU

Once I started reading the first few sentences, I was hooked immediately by the intriguing beginning of the story. There was always this constant curiosity that followed me throughout the story as I continued.

This short story not only brings beauty and colors to the character who needed it, readers also get to indulge in the descriptions that was written. However, the story ends in quite an underwhelming way with only a few figurative languages used and a lack of descriptions of the settings. But nonetheless, although the story might be a little too fast-paced, in the end, the meaning of the story is still well-delivered by the unique characters. There are only slight grammar errors that can be easily missed which allows the story to flow quite well.

For those who are looking for a meaningful short story to entertain yourself, then this story is recommended.

This review is about a short story called "Through You" written by raissa2606. It's written in english language and published in 2017. It has a total of 4 completed pages.

The story is telling us about a blind girl and a mysterious guy at the beach. Out of nowhere, the guy is telling the girl about things she can't see. About what is happening at the moment, what color are the sun and the sky, about the birds and the waves, about everything at the beach. At first, the girl goes angry at the boy but things turned around and they become closer.

I think the writer should make an orientation or an opening of the story instead of starting it with a dialogue. It should be started with the girl's perspective or point of view to attach the reader's feelings, and make the readers understand the girl's character. This story uses the chronological plot with no flashbacks at all, so that the readers can understand the story easily.

The writer of this story didn't name the character, the writer only uses the guy and the girl. This technique is very good to me because it can expand the reader's imagination and let them name the characters by themselves. From the story, we know that the guy's character is really bold because he talks to the girl without any hesitation. We also know that the girl is brave and not afraid to defend herself even though in this situation the guy is not a bad guy.

The writing style of this story is really easy to understand, to the point, and not long-winded. But, i think the writer should add more vocabulary to the story because it seems a little boring and flat. For example, the writer uses the word 'suddenly' twice when the guy talks and holds her hand. It doesn't seem right and things are happening too quickly.

I don't see any grammar errors and the writer uses past tense and the first point of view which is from the girl's character.

Overall, i think it is a very touching story and the tension in the last scenes are able to make the reader's heart beating fast. I love that it ends with a happy ending and doesn't leave me hanging. This story can be read by anyone and has a good moral. Which is not to judge a book by it's cover or to judge by appearance only. Understanding is important. And also bonding and building a connection with the other person.

This story has good moral value to judge people not from appearance or body but from feel. So touch heart and give a nice ending. I believe allow this story people can learn about kindness and sincerity.

'Don't judge book from its cover.' As well in this short story that told us not to always use our eyes to judge people through their looks or riches. Sometimes, you need to 'blind' yourself and use your feeling to assess people around you.

Incredibly heartwarming story.

I admit I was a little baffled in the beginning. I thought the man's actions were eerie and a little rude, bearning that he emerged out of the blue. The plot of this story is very familiar, yet for some reason I didn't see it coming. The end had really hit hard, which is a feeling I seek when reading stories.

The writing style really swayed me as well, through its use of practical yet astute words, sharp as a knife. The author did a brilliant job conveying emotions through words. In spite of several grammatical errors here and there, the work itself remains undisturbed. They're not too noticable, although it would definitely help to have them altered.

In overall, it's a job well-done. I'm looking forth to reading more from the author!